Erotica author, aka Elspeth Potter, on Writing from the Inside

Monday, March 2, 2009

Historical Detail in Fiction

I've been putting together my thoughts on how I include history in novels, for example the World War One detail in Moonlight Mistress.

The first thing is to create a sense of normality. The characters do ordinary things in an ordinary way; ordinary, that is, for this year in this place. Specificity is key.

For example, in writing description, writing teachers often laud the virtues of specificity: not a flower, but a freshly unfurled red tulip as bright as candy.

When a novel is historical, you don't have to make up most of those details; your research takes care of that. I research, as most people do, far more than I "need" to research, but that extra effort can pay off in unexpectedly useful ways. So the first thing is knowing specific details, or having them handy for when they're needed.

The second thing is an ongoing process. I don't insert my historical factoids at precise, mathematically calculated intervals. I drip them in instead, like rain working its way through a roof to occasionally trickle down your neck. This I can break down into a numbered list.

1. If you have an opportunity to use a historical detail rather than a vague detail, do it. Don't rummage in your pocket; rummage in the pocket of your poplin shirtwaist.

2. It helps to keep in mind what has changed between then and now. Those are things the reader needs to know to before they can be immersed in this new world. To a character in 1914, the daily arrival of the iceman would be an ordinary event; so if you need a bit of business to dress up a conversation, perhaps you could interrupt their conversation, briefly, by the iceman's arrival.

3. Details work better in action than in description alone; that's a general principle I've seen in many guides to writing. So one can describe a room and note the collection of hats on a hatstand, because women wore hats every day, but it's better if the reader sees those hats because the woman is selecting one to wear for an afternoon's shopping. Details inserted in this way can accumulate to good effect.

4. A big pet peeve of mine, which I will never write, and I recommend no one else write either: "Oh, come now! It's [name your year/era]! We're modern people, we don't do that any more!"

5. And sometimes one does simply describe, just as in non-historical writing. Don't go overboard in avoiding brief descriptive passages. If the character is visiting a huge, magnificent site, they would take note of its hugeness and magnificence and spend a few moments looking around before doing anything else.

The photos in this post are from World War One. Yes, they did have color photographs!

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Synergy in Writing and Research.
Reading for the Writer.

What are your tips and tricks for writing historical settings?


  1. Great little tips! Detailed descriptions usually serve better than vague ones as long as we don't go overboard.

    Much like with fantasy or paranormal, I find that authors can drop in details in context without too much explanation and the reader will just pick it up and start to weave the world together in their heads.

  2. Great post, Victoria! I find it's always a fine line between just using a detail as an ordinary fact/occurrence and explaining it enough for the modern reader who may not be well versed in your era. As Jeannie said, context is key.

  3. How do you know where to do the best research? I'm trying to research 1840s France, and I'm wondering if you know any good books.

  4. How do you know where to do the best research? I'm trying to research 1840s France, and I'm wondering if you know any good books.

    If I'm totally at a loss, I start with a basic history text, or even a childrens' book. That usually gives me enough information to do a more detailed library search. Whenever I find a book that seems particularly useful, I hunt through the bibliography for more books. And I browse in libraries.

  5. My whole comment got deleted because I messed up. But basically I was showing my appreciation for your apt way of describing subtle detailing. Thank you for this post.